People buy something because they think that it will change their life. Advertising makes products look better or make us believe that they are better than they are actually. In fact I don't go shopping very often, but I sometimes buy something which I think is necessary at that moment and then I realise that I have wasted money. I have a lot of clothes because I don't like wearing the same clothes every day.
In conclusion, we have to know that products don't change our life and money doesn't make us happier but it helps.
TÒFOL OLIVES ESCUDERO, "2C"
Now try to correct the mistakes in red and add CORRECTED in the title. Remember to keep the mistakes in red.
ResponderEliminarI agree with toful in the part which he explain that society is materialist because it is true due to people buys a lot of thing whent they don't need them.
ResponderEliminarI like reading this composition and I agree with Tofol because it's true that nowadays, despite we are in "crisis", people also waste much money in innecessary things that we want at the moment we see them, in order to worry about more important and necessary things like food or to saving money for our future.
ResponderEliminarNow read the essay and pay attention to the words in blue. Then erase the words in red and change the whole colour (original colour- black) and write FINAL VERSION next to the title.
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