In these last years, shopping is more important for our society. It can be said that shopping is an addiction that in some cases it can be very difficult to control.
Firstly, I think that advertising is one of the reasons why people have shopping addiction. The shops try to attract more customers with advertising in order that they buy their products, in some cases they can be cheated because the advertising can be deceiving.
Secondly, I believe that the shops change the prices and the things constantly. It is a way to make people who go to the shops see different things and they will want to have them. Therefore, most people buy a lot of things that they don’t need.
In conclusion, it is clear that many people are not conscious when they buy things. As a result we have to know what we really buy and what we need since sometimes they cheat us.
Aina Isbert 2B
Now try to correct the mistakes in red and add CORRECTED in the title. Remember to keep the mistakes in red. Try not to translate literally.
ResponderEliminarI agree with you that exist a shopping addiction where people buy lot of things that they don't needed.We could say that this is due in large part to advertising, trying to attract a large crowd of people.
ResponderEliminarI think that your writing is fine and I agree with you when you say that there is an addictions due to the advertising and cheap products.
ResponderEliminarNow read the essay and pay attention to the words in blue. Then erase the words in red and change the whole colour (original colour- black) and write FINAL VERSION next to the title.
ResponderEliminarI agree that many people buy things they do not really need, but it's normal. To me personally do not like shopping, but I love having new clothes, like the most people. If someone have no money, they manage with what they have, but when someone have money, often people buy something that is not absolutely necessary, but this is so and will remain so forever.
ResponderEliminar